Short Self Introduction In Japanese

Almost finished Chapter 7 now. I wrote a small piece about my family and introducing myself. It is really bad (I use です so often I look like I'm really stupid). Well, anyway...here it is (mind I have not checked it yet, so I don't know if it is correct). If you know Japanese, please help me correct this.

初めまして。エリです。二十歳です。イギリスのロンドンのそばに住んでいます。父は日本の会社に勤めています。母はイギリス人で、五十八歳です。母は高校に勤めています。父は背が高くて、怖いです。父はちょっと太っています。よく食べますから。家族は犬がいます。なまえはTheoです。Theoが大好き。お姉さんが二人います。妹が一人います。

What is should say: Nice to meet you, I am Ellie. I am 20 years old. I live near London in England. My father works for a Japanese company (Olympus). My mother is English and is 58 years old. My mother works for a high school. My father is tall and scary. My dad is a little overweight, because he eats a lot. My family owns a dog. His name is Theo. I love Theo. I have two older sisters. I have one younger sister.

Sorry that my Japanese is awful and is written in a strange sounding way. I wanted to fit in as many different grammar points from Chapter 7 as I could so it doesn't flow exactly right. Haha and I hope I havent offended my dad. >.<

Quick update

Yes, I know I have almost spent an entire month on Chapter 7. Lately, my health and motivation has deteriorated. I have not given up on learning, its just going to take much longer than I predicted. I am now almost at the end of Chapter 7, a lot of grammar is piling up and I'm trying to find ways to remember it all so I keep referring back which is taking a lot of time. I am going to post in a couple of days after the chapter is finished and write something in Japanese. Hopefully it makes some sense. 

It's not going very well

So I haven't been studying, at all...I'm disappointed in myself. I don't even have a good enough excuse other than my health problems slightly getting worse lately. I have lost some of the motivation that I had right at the beginning of the year and its getter harder and harder to study when the list of words is endless and I have to spend a long time reviewing them. I have only just begun studying Chapter 7 and I am supposed to have finished it by now :S I have learned the vocabulary and I am going to begin the grammar tomorrow. It seems like I'm forgetting so much of the grammar though, and I keep excusing myself for not doing anything. I can only hope that I get motivated soon so that I don't give up.

Chapter 6 finished!

Completed Chapter 6 last night just in time for March 1st :) I think Im going to spend the next few days reviewing what I have learnt and then start Chapter 7 on Monday :) Things are difficult lately because I have M.E. and it is bad at the moment, so hard to focus when all you want to do is sleep.